Persuasive writing

Persuading can be a very hard thing to do. So you have come to the right place. Here we can tell you the the best places to advertise. For your new product of walkie talkies, you should use TV. Its a lot fairer and most people have working TV.

TV is much fairer unlike other internet pop ups. Websites are fair but pop up adverts are not. If you want fear advertising to sell your products TV is the way to go! The internet has no rules so people trick you into downloading and buying their products which automatically gives them all your details so now they can hack you with a computer virus. You don’t want your product advertising being able to be sabotaged through hackers. On TV people will see your walkie talkies and they will think “Hmmmm Christmas is soon, I could get some for the kids.”  So they are a great idea

This is a great example of what your TV advert could look like. This is a very good advertisement that would make you wanna buy these walkie talkies. “These walkie talkies are great for hide and go seek and go up to 300 metres away in range. So these are an amazingly good option for presents.” “If your kids love playing army these are also really good for using imagination.” Imagine all the people wanting to buy your walkie talkies. You will turn into a millionaire! Imagine the sales. your products will be going out the door like crazy!

So advertise on the TV not the internet, this is a much fairer way without getting internet bugs like viruses. These walkie talkies last for hours. So this means hours of fun. They are waterproof and are great for having a picnic lunch down at the park. Even playing spot light at night without shouting out to your friends and giving your spot away.

These are the best walkie talkies all round and they are a great price. Get them now. For your kids Christmas presents. They are not just for the kids but they suit adults too!

A Friend Poem

A friend is someone who looks out for someone

A friend is a person who looks after one another

When you get hurt your friend helps you

A friend looks out for you when you're feeling down

A friend sticks with you when you’re being picked on

Friends are the people you are with all the time that you love to be with

They don’t need to be popular or smart

They can be any shape and size as long as there friendly and kind

We all need friends

Your friends need you

So if you are feeling lonely your friends will look after you

To be a good friend you need to share

You can never have too many friends!

All Blacks in Napier

 Friday I went to Napier for an All Blacks signing at Farmers. We had to wait an hour before they turned up. They were Jullien Savea, Liam Messam and Owen Franks. When we got close Mum told me to take my All Blacks top. I replied "What, why would I want to taky my top off infront of everyone!"
Mun then said "It will be easier for them to sign it."
"Ok" I said. I wipped myy t-shirt off and Jullien Savea and Liam Messam said  got big guns"
I smiled when they said that and I was really happy. Then right when we were leaving I was asked to hold up my top for a photo for the Hawke's Bay Today. It got even greater, it was for the front page of the Hawke's Bay today.

 This photo below is my favourite with Richie McCaw, Kieren Reid and Dane Coles. Thye were in Starbucks Napier. It was a great expierence to meet Richie McCaw
                                     THE CAPTAIN OF THE ALL BLACKS

 In the end I went through town and saw 5 more All Blacks they were Ben Franks, Dane Coles, Richie McCaw, Kieren Read, Jurome Kaino, I am so happy I got to meet the All Blacks

In this photo I had Blossom for karts. This is an annual karting event that happends once a year and I had never came second in. I have been in this event 2 or 3 times. I really enjoyed this event since it is over 2 days. I was racing NZ 2. That means he is the second best in New Zealand. I felt really good beating him. I am really happy with my resuilt in Blossom 47!

My journal of the production

13/8/14

Dear Diary, let me introduce myself. My name is Ben and my role in the production is part is Korito. So far my favourite thing in the production is Ezra and his walk in thunderstruck, it makes me laugh. On Friday we are going to do a rehearsal and it is going to be really good. My favourite thing about being in the production is learning the legends and the history. Our story in the production is called The 7 Whales of Wairoa. I am nervous about my lines,  I know them all though. I am a little bit annoyed though with the shark group being silly all the time. I am really sad about being turned to a hill at the end. Also I almost forgot that one of the class axolotls is named after me. Korito sounds a bit Mexican though. I feel famous now though. I am not looking forward to doing the production infront of all the parents.

Retelling Ghosts of Young Nick's Head

Thunder and lightning strikes across the veranda. The window is creaking and shaking. Eddy flips his page in his Harry Potter book. Suddenly the light starts to dim then BANG! the light shatters into the darkness. Eddy lets out a little scream. Then they hear a creaking coming towards the bedroom. “Who is it?” They get no reply as Joe and Eddy start to hide. Then they knock a potato sack all of the floor. The dim light of the fire starts to glow. The shadow starts to get closer. The boys close their eyes. Then a sudden gust of wind hisses and heaves through the house. The boys open their eyes. The black outline of the figure is gone. Eddy yells “Did you see how close we were to dying!”

Joe replies "Yeah” as he lets out some tears.

They look out the window The rain plunges down on the rugged paddock. As the boys analyze the room in the darkness they can tell it was an aged worn out room. Joe says to Eddie “No wonder this place is haunted.” Joe replies.
"We don’t know for sure if this place is haunted.” Eddy says.

"Look out at the cliff face." the boys say as the water splashes up over the rocks. “So what are we going to do with no power?” Joe says to Eddy.

“I don’t know.” Eddy shouts back.

“Will this rain ever end Eddy?” Joe speaks.

“Yes of course it will!” Eddy says.

Then the boys hear somebody coming up the stairs. “Who is it?" they shout...

My turtles play hide and seek

“Srape scrape” I hear, coming from the turtle tank I am sitting around my houses dining room, where  one of my turtles is peeking her head by the lights wires. She is standing on her land pad. Then she is stretching out her back feet and stretching her head out of the tank. I lean over to see her and go hello in a funny tone. I go back and sit on the couch and play xbox, then suddenly Mum walks through the door with an unexpected visitor, the turtle. I haven’t got a name for her yet though. When Mum placed the turtle down she had a sparkle in her eye. she looked at me, and made a run for it. Nooo I chase after her then  I grab her then she scratches me with all her might but she is a girl so it didn’t hurt much. Ouch.

Mum now pulls my other turtle out. She changes her gears and speeds as fast as her can towards the couch and I grab her. I see her shell is flaking everywhere. I grab her but it is too late, he makes it under the couch. I am touching her but I can’t seem to pull her out. Wait…

Where is the other big turtle gone? I hear a Bung Crash Smash coming from behind the heater. This would be worse if there was the cat inside. Mum lifts the couch while I  stick my hand under and grab the brave curious turtle. She scratches. Then I take them both out below there tank in the dining room. I put them side by side. My big turtle looks out for my little turtle, my little turtle followed my big turtle side by side. Then my little turtle made a detour towards the fridge. I grab her then I lose grip. She is lost under the fridge. I wait 5 minutes. He pops out. I grab her then I chucked her in his tank. I grab the big turtle that doesn’t want to go back in. She scratches me and  I drop her! Luckily she was on the mat. She lands upside down but fortunately she is not hurt. I put him back in. Then they relax in the sunny light in there tank.

Turtles rock

Broken

This device (phone) is broken.

Write about a time you broke something!

OR

Imagine that you broke your device or phone and describe how it happened.

WALT use different sentence starters and lengths.

To do this, I will try to:

• Start sentences with different words
• Start sentences with capital letters
• Use other punctuation (check the ladder)
• Show my feelings
• Use my senses to describe
• Include strong verbs

BROKEN

I am jogging up the street when suddenly my phone slips out of my hand and pulls my headphones out of my ears with it. My phones upside down and I am sad and angry to find out the state. It’s smashed like a plane plunging down into the concrete. It was not a nice sight for my eyes. Seeing it replay over and over in my head in slow motion. People saying to me oooowwww! Why can’t they keep their mouths shut? Rocketing to the ground without a parachute the pink case wizzing through my vision hearing the wind. Why did this happen to me? My phone costs over a thousand dollars. Oh man my parents will kill me for this, Wait is that my parents car in the distance...

My cat clumsy!

Clumsy

cuddly as a cushion

cute as a teddy bear

rough as a tiger

loud as a sirun

aggressive as a squirrel with nuts

painful scratcher

digs like a Mole

three quarters bad

animal mad

deep sleeper

long sleeper

long meower

animal eater

mistufe maker

cushion wrecker

grey as a koala  

harmful as a knife

eats like a pig.

Silly sausage

my

cat

Clumsy.

I can taste fresh air lurking

5 Senses writing

I can taste the fresh air lurking. I can hear birds chirping to their families. I can see horses with their silky brown furry mains. I can touch the electric fence  and get a shock. I can smell Horse poo whiffling through the air. Blue sky overgrown tree top canopies  over a house across from school Te Mata the sleeping giant laying there dead. I hear a plane swooping over my head. Smokey grey sky not rain clouds, something you don't see everyday. I can feel the sun beating down on my neck making me get burnt. I see nature roaming the earth. The horse is running up and  down like a lunatic getting chased with a hammer. I can see cliffs off the side of Te Mata peak.

I see and feel Pollen in the air. I see cars driving on Howard street, Spider webs spun on the long wet brown grass. Silence around the environment.

Autumn leaves falling to the ground.

Rock and roll

The last few days we have been doing Rock and roll here is a list of words about rock and roll

How to be a good Rock n’ Roller

By Ollie, Cameron and Ben

To be a fantastic rock n’ roller you need remember to some of these word.

Look Sharp.

To have nice clothes.

Be Polite.

To talk nice to your partner and be happy

Practise 
then you will get really good and be a good dancer.

Practise Practise Practise!

Go with the Beat, tune, rhythm and music.

Listen and dance to the beat of the music.

Be nice no matter who your partner

It’s just a dance so you get to know people around you are not getting engaged and getting married!

Firm Stepping

Be firm but not so your stomping otherwise you fall slip if you are too light.

Respect

Respect your partner no matter who they are even if they are a boy or girl.

Cruisey

Don’t be stiff.

Now you should be a fantastic respectful rock and roller.

Thanks for reading

A Birthday In The Life Of Ozzie Kingsford

Ozzie kingsford by Ben Hibbs on GoAnimate

 This is me and Marcus's go animate. I hope you enjoy it! The book is called A Birthday in the life of Ozzie Kingsford. The book was written by Val Bird and illustrated by Rebecca Cundy. I hope you enjoy our Go Animate! On the right you will see me I am the guy who is wearing a white top and Marcus is wearing a yellow top

Below you can read along to what we are saying on the Go Animate. 

I Hope you enjoy and please comment!

Ben: hey Marcus

Marcus: hello Ben

Marcus: hey what was your favourite part of a birthday in the life of Ozzie Kingsford book?

Ben: My favourite part is when they crash the car, What was your favourite part of the book?

Marcus: My favorite part of the book was when Ozzies father was head butted by that goat, HA HA HA!

What we thought about the book.

Marcus: It was coming with sudden things that you didn’t know it would happen.


My favourite role for the story would have to be illustraiter because I loved drawing pictures of parts of the book.

My letter to Ken Catran

Dear Ken Catran

Hi, I’m Ben Hibbs and I go to Parkvale School Hastings New Zealand. Last week my class finished reading Dead Harry and I thought the book was fantastic! My favourite part is where Harry puts his eyeball into the chocolate wrappers because that is my type of thing. We got a few frights at the end of the chapters and wanted our teacher to read more, but he made us wait till the next day for the next chapter.

My favourite character is Harry. I like Harry because he does tricks on his mate Sam and that made me laugh alot. I think it was funny when Harry was inside the chocolate wrappers and said “I can’t eat chocolates anymore”. I laughed and thought you are so funny Harry.

I really enjoyed Dead Harry!

Yours sincerely,

Ben Hibbs

Parkvale School

Dragon writing

WALA Sentences 

Once upon a time I had a dragon land on my finger. It breathed out fire.  I named him Timmy. And he was a silly billy. He flew through my bedroom window. Maybe the last of the species. I gave him some raw fish. But he cooked them with his fiery breath. One day he burnt the house down. Oh Timmy, I sighed. When we moved to a new house he ate more and more food. And water as if it was real. I think that Timmy is a beautiful dragon. But a silly billy. He has sharp cone shaped claws and bat shaped wings, so swift through the wind as he flies around the property and Timmy brings not very nice surprises around the property like, birds butterflies although the nextdoor cat was happy. We built a room of steel. I keep my dragon in the steel room so he can't catch my house on on fire.

Wildebeest writing

This is my Wildebeest writing. We used an app called I fake text. I like how i'ts like an I-phone. Here is my writing below

“Lets cross the island” said Munchin.

“No there is a crocodile in the water!” says Crackers

They start arguing, “Its a log” snorts Munchin.

“No a Crocodile,” said Crackers.

“I will kick it then”  Munchin says to Crackers.

“I will stand on it” said Crackers.

He goes and hops on...“Maybe you are right says Crackers.

CRUNCH! “Crocodile” Says Munchin.

Another Wildebeest comes along “is that a log”

“NO!”  

To be continued...

Suddenly An Earthquake!

The earthquake!

The earthquake this morning was huge. I am really freaked out because there will probably be another earthquake later I hope it won't be huge because of all the families with kids who need to get under the table. I need to get an emergency bag ready in case of a bigger one later. I rush and make sure I know where torches are.

Finally dinner. There had only been a few unnoticeable earthquakes. I got calmer there had been no more earthquakes. We had been checking on Geonet Its a handy website to see if there is an earthquake.  By bedtime there were no more earthquakes. I could go to sleep and rest.

Thanks for reading my writing

The Rata tree

The Rata tree

We get to the path where the Rata tree is. We start walking, I was right up the front it was slippery and wet. 5 minutes later the track splits into 2! I call to Mr M “Which way?”

he goes back to see Mrs Hill, “Should we go up the steep track because its quicker”.

“No it might be a bit too slippery and people will slip over and they will take each other out” said Mrs Hill

We decide to take the longer but easier track.

Later on we see a weta box!  We open up the box, there were no wetas in there. We hear a big sigh from room 16 “Oohhh”

Finally we make it to the Rata tree “its massive!” I say to Ollie.

“ Yeah wow I am amazed I love camp Kaitawa” said Ollie

Finally it was my turn I get to climb through the tree. I was so excited! I climbed up, it was as slippery as a whale in the water. As I climb I slipped on the way because up there were huge puddles all over the Rata tree where the roots were, I climbed through the Rata tree and I wave to the girls and adults they wave back I turn around to come back. Then I stop in my tracks to a HUGE SPIDER...

I keep walking trying not to think about the spider. I jump past it but there is another spider I’m so glad its about 3 metres away spinning a big web.

I hop down and I slip big time into a branch. I move and I get down then we start walking back to the vehicles, I am in front. I am first to get back to the cars. It was really slippery on the clay I go sprinting down, I really enjoyed the walk/run!

This is me in the middle of the Rata Tree.

My camp reflection

Reflection for Camp

My goal for camp was not to get to home sick

I achieved this because I was fine and did not get home sick.

Something I was pleased with was having warm showers

because I hate cold showers!

I really enjoyed learning the different stuff about room 16

because everyone was really different like Liam, talking about salami, Marcus being the loudest in the animal game!

Something I found hard was caving with the big spiders really close to me

Something that made me think was kayaking

because I was trying to get faster but I could not get faster

· My top 5 favourite things about camp were:

Favourite Things	Reason Why
1. Kayaking	I was quick because I had done it before although it still was hard.
2. Bedtime stories	I loved them because they were nice and a little bit scary but not really.
3. Mobilo	Building strong cars and having battles with my friends.
4. Kiwi	getting to touch a kiwi for the first time ever!
5. Making the club with Liam, Ollie and Cam	I enjoyed making the club because its lasted all the way till now and it's going to last.